Yes it might be overdone? will you C/C please?

I'm not a big fan of poetry, but I liked it. Very nice. Imaginative, distinctive, whimsical, yet coherent (if you take the time to understand that it's about a young, likely girl, reminiscing about a pleasant experience she shared with her mother during a Summer rain). Don't let anyone tell you you can't write poetry or that you should change your style!